They Never Saw it Coming
This is my first Friday Fictioneers. Please enjoy.
Copywrite: David Stewart
“Jeff, we shouldn’t do this,” Peter said climbing the ladder after his brother.
“No, but it’s the best place to see Jensen’s cannon and fireworks show.
Peter, Jeff, Liz, and Ephraim sit atop the cool metal sphere waiting for dusk when the show begins. Ephraim, the life of the party, somehow manages to bring a bunch of beer; and Liz, the fake princess, brought some weed. They laugh, drink, and smoke while waiting for the first cannon-shot and fireworks.
It came with a loud boom followed by a stream of fireworks and a crash. They never saw it coming.
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16 responses to “They Never Saw it Coming”
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Ouch! Talk about mixing together things that shouldn’t be mixed. Welcome to the Friday Fictioneers!
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Thanks for the welcome! I hope you enjoyed it.
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First, welcome to Friday Fictioneers. Warning! It’s a habit that many of us don’t care to break. 😉 Highly addictive.
Love the image of Admiral Boom. I recently watched Mary Poppins again after all these years.
Hope your roof sitters wise up if they live through the 4th.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Hi Rochelle, thanks for the welcome. Mary Poppins is definitely one of my all time favorite movies. I’ll be sure to check out Friday Fictioneers next week. 😀
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Way to go, as they say. Snappy little piece.
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Hi Sandra, glad you stopped by. “Snappy little piece” eh. I like that and thanks for the feedback.
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Oooh, quite a shocking end! Nicely done.
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Thanks Jan for stopping by. Glad you enjoyed it.
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I’d imagine….
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I think this is a great story and is something I can see a much younger version of myself being part of.
I wonder if the verb tense shift was intended.
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it. No the tense shift wasn’t intentional. Thanks for the catch. That’s what happens when you write something in 10 minutes while at work.
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An unhappy Fourth for them!
janet
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Yeah, I wanted a little more carnage and maybe I’ll do that later.
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I think the guy who fired the cannon had shared in their stash–I heard he thought it would be funny to give them a little scare.
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When I wrote that I had Admiral Boom from Mary Poppins in mind.
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That’s the wrong place for alcohol and weed. They were no wiser.
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