Day 5: 15 Day Writing Challenge

Day 5: Your character wakes up with a key in his/her hand.  How did he/she get it?  What does it lock and unlock?

When Benny woke up he didn’t know where he was or how he got there

His hand was oddly numb and when he tried to move it he couldn’t. When he looked at he noticed a key was duct taped to it and a note pinned to his shirt.

Meet me at Coleman Manor at 2 pm. And don’t forget the key.

Benny didn’t know who he was meeting and still had no clue where was. He got up and surveyed the space. There wasn’t much there by way of furniture. There was the sofa he woke up on, a chair and table. It was cold  and smelled like something had died, but he assumed that was because of the mounds of trash.

He looked out the window and realized that he was at the old Miller’s Mine. He surveyed the room once more and noticed there were bunk beds hidden among the piles of trash. ‘This must be where the miners slept. Benny wondered if that old clock on the wall was right. If so, he only had 45 minutes to get Buell and on a good day it could take an hour. He found his phone and according to it he only had 30 minutes.

As he ran out of the building and to his car, he couldn’t believe that he was actually going through with this. He knew he wasn’t going to make it in time, but for some reason he kept going. Speeding and weaving in and of traffic. His phone rang and the person on the end said, ‘You’re not going to make it in time. You’ll have to suffer the consequences.’

He drives faster and weaves even more dangerously in and out of traffic. Five minutes after two he squeals into the Colman Manor driveway. He hoped they gave him a grace period. He walked cautiously up the front steps and tried the door. It didn’t open, so he rang the bell. No one answered. He heard noises coming from inside and he kept hearing the voice on the other end of the line telling him that he wouldn’t make it in time.

Benny remembered the key, which he fished from his pocket. He hesitated a moment and wondered why he was doing this. Was he really all that curious or was he just stupid? He tried the key. It worked. He slowly opened the door and stepped in. It was dark with the exception of what little light was coming through the pulled drapes. He saw a shadow out of the corner of his eye and followed it. Just like in the movies. When he rounded the corner he heard the telephone voice say, I thought I’d give you a few more minutes.

“Thank you,” Benny said in an almost inaudible whisper.

“Don’t you want to know why you’re here.”

“Y-Y-Yes,” Benny stammered.

There was a long painful and uncomfortable silence. The floorboards squealed under pressure and suddenly the lights came on. Benny looked around and saw his mother as well as other familiar faces.

“What’s going on?” he asked.

“You said you wanted to do something different for your birthday,” his wife, Margo said. “And I’m surprised at you that you didn’t even recognize your own wife’s voice on the phone.

“But how did I get to the mines?”

“You didn’t pay attention when I gave you your sleeping pill last night. I gave you two instead of one.”

“And, let me tell you something,” Jake said. “You need to either hit the gym more or stop eating so much. I thought my back was going to break carrying you downstairs.”


Margo led Benny over to a table and poured him a glass of champagne, “Happy birthday, darling.”


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